Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wyfzJTYu7ER34xCSLjETM1YCgBYCm-AvVsCQjuxVsk4/edit
Here comes the critique:
The year is 2001, when being gay isn't really normally accepted
The grown adults on Reddit, when given a chance to critique the writing of a literal child, somehow make it worse
Not that there's not anything to critique, check out the opening line:
I looked out at my window from the bus to Stars Hollow, Connecticut, and then checked my watch. The time was 1:45 p.m., but I really didn't know what time it was because my clock hadn't adjusted to the time zone yet. It's about an hour until I reach Stars Hollow.
"The time was 13:45:32 on the dot, but actually I didn't know what time it was because my (analog) watch hadn't adjusted to the time zone yet"
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lol
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Is a very funny comment!!!
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!writecel
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For a 14 year old she's got a pretty good grasp on the era I'll give her that.
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What if an r-slur was gay?
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It's funny because Gilmore Girls is a hella gay show. I remember this kid I went to elementary with in like the 3rd grade everybody knew he was gonna end up being gay but he was obsessed with Gilmore Girls and desperate housewives and shit like that. Ended up coming out in like the 10th grade to nobodies surprise.
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Soβ¦what's your point? What's the interesting or surprising part of this story? That you went to school with a gay? that a seven year old wasn't openly gay? That a cute twink liked gay shit?? That you completed at least ten years of formal schooling??
Like what is my experience of this comment supposed to be if it's not a shit post (and tbh I don't think it is). How do you have conversations IRL?
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The point is that Gilmore Girls was a gay show... Thought that was pretty clear
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